Hi Carys, this is a great story. Your idea is very original idea and I like the way you have included lots of description and lots of interesting vocabulary. I also like how you have used lots of different types of sentences and questions to make the story interesting. Next time, perhaps use a dictionary to help you with your spelling. Great job!
Hi Carys, this is a great story. Your idea is very original idea and I like the way you have included lots of description and lots of interesting vocabulary. I also like how you have used lots of different types of sentences and questions to make the story interesting. Next time, perhaps use a dictionary to help you with your spelling. Great job!